Hmm...Here's a bit from a piece I've been working on periodically. The antagonist in this one was interviewed somewhere already because he refused to leave me alone. lol, here we go.
Groaning, I rolled over and blinked a few times to bring my alarm clock into focus. Three-thirty in the morning? Who the hell was texting me at three-thirty?
With sloppy movements, I activated my touch screen and winced against the bright light as the unfamiliar number popped onto the screen.
'Bitch. Where are you?'
So begins Beth!
lol well, who was it? And where's she supposed to be? Nice start!
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh, great last line!
ReplyDeleteAwesome! I want more!
ReplyDeleteThat's a grab and hook. Great six!
ReplyDeletelol, nice text!
ReplyDeleteGreat six!
Oh, love this. Great six, Lindsay
ReplyDeleteOh, I wanna read more! Good start, Lindsay!
ReplyDeleteNice
ReplyDeleteOh my, it's never good to get such a text from an unknown number. And at such an early hour! So many grabs in six short sentences.
ReplyDeleteNot a good text to receive. Nice six!
ReplyDeleteWho's bed is she in? Hers. You left us with a great hook
ReplyDeleteHmm, such language for 3:30 in the morning.
ReplyDeleteYour description was amazing...seriously, I felt like I was there experiencing that. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteExcellent hook into the story--suspenseful six!
ReplyDeleteMy interest is definitely peaked!
ReplyDeleteWell, whoever it is, he/she definitely knows how to get a response. Them's fightin' words! LOL!
ReplyDeleteEek, scary! I'd be wide awake after a text like that.
ReplyDeleteintriguing! sounds like you're off to a great start with this one!
ReplyDeleteOh dear, poor gal, being awoken like that.
ReplyDeleteA rude awakening, for sure!
ReplyDeleteTerrific hook. So many quetions to answer
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