"Mom says I'll catch fire one day for all the sparks flying off me," I deadpanned. "So what brings you by tonight?" I waved congenially to the last of the tourists leaving for the night until it was just me and Shadow. Elena and Stetson had sure as hell been gone for awhile.
"I can't just stop in for a beer?"
"Honey, your kind never just stops in for something."
(I promise Shadow's not as much of an ass as he came off to be last week. LOL)
26 comments:
First of all, great name. Shadow. Second, I really just cracked up with that last line. Great work!
That last line reveals so much. Great job.
Can't wait to see what the angle is here! Great dialogue!
Great six and a great last line. love the interplay going on here.
lol great last line!
Love the last line and the banter between these two!
Loved these six. Love the characters. Would like to read more.
your kind never stops in for just a beer, I love it. Great interaction between the pair.
"Your kind"? Oh I want to know just what she means by that.
I love it when other characters' dialogue reveals so much. Very nice indeed.
Great six and I agree, the last line is super. Great undertone between the two.
Heh, love the last line! great six.
Great insight into your characters! I look forward to reading more. :)
great last line, nothing like a sassy comeback
Nice, vivid character voice.
One wonders what he wants. I shall have to come back for more.
LOL I love that last line. Great job!
Those two are definitely striking sparks, and that's a great hook with the "your kind" line!
We all have high hopes for him.
Last line is pure win!
Love that last line. I can hear it perfectly.
As everyone else has said, it's all about that last line. Perfect delineation of character--both his and hers. Great six.
Love that last line! :)
Love the last line. Great six!
Fantastic last line. Geat six!
That last line was great!
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