Hmm...Here's a bit from a piece I've been working on periodically. The antagonist in this one was interviewed somewhere already because he refused to leave me alone. lol, here we go.
Groaning, I rolled over and blinked a few times to bring my alarm clock into focus. Three-thirty in the morning? Who the hell was texting me at three-thirty?
With sloppy movements, I activated my touch screen and winced against the bright light as the unfamiliar number popped onto the screen.
'Bitch. Where are you?'
So begins Beth!
21 comments:
lol well, who was it? And where's she supposed to be? Nice start!
Oh my gosh, great last line!
Awesome! I want more!
That's a grab and hook. Great six!
lol, nice text!
Great six!
Oh, love this. Great six, Lindsay
Oh, I wanna read more! Good start, Lindsay!
Nice
Oh my, it's never good to get such a text from an unknown number. And at such an early hour! So many grabs in six short sentences.
Not a good text to receive. Nice six!
Who's bed is she in? Hers. You left us with a great hook
Hmm, such language for 3:30 in the morning.
Your description was amazing...seriously, I felt like I was there experiencing that. Nicely done!
Excellent hook into the story--suspenseful six!
My interest is definitely peaked!
Well, whoever it is, he/she definitely knows how to get a response. Them's fightin' words! LOL!
Eek, scary! I'd be wide awake after a text like that.
intriguing! sounds like you're off to a great start with this one!
Oh dear, poor gal, being awoken like that.
A rude awakening, for sure!
Terrific hook. So many quetions to answer
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